Hi Fraidon, I like your story plan, as it sounds creative, and unlike any other narrative that I've read, it has an unhappy ending. That should make it interesting! Sill, you some mistakes such as at the last part for the thought and feeling it is supposed to be They're dead, not their dead, as they're means they are and their means a place. Also, The title should be in capitals. Anyway, have fun writing that story!
Hi Fraidon,
ReplyDeleteI like your story plan, as it sounds creative, and unlike any other narrative that I've read, it has an unhappy ending. That should make it interesting! Sill, you some mistakes such as at the last part for the thought and feeling it is supposed to be They're dead, not their dead, as they're means they are and their means a place. Also, The title should be in capitals. Anyway, have fun writing that story!
Keep up the good work,
Thomas